Foozzz, this wuff always looks forward to reading your stories. The emotions, the characters, the settings--they all seem so visceral, solid, real.  This one is every bit as delightful as what Vargr has come to expect! 

You have a wonderful way with words; the prose is much like poetry. Very evocative and lyrical. A delight to read.

That shower scene was very erotic in such a sensual and loving way. So unlike the hurried, frantic lust and thrusting of those tales told just for the yifful aspect. Yet none the less passionate (and aphrodisiacal) for the artistic rendition of it.

You might want to edit one sentence in there; wuff was a little confused by it: "The sun was cutting into his naked mouse's tail, too, felt like sunburn." Perhaps something like, "The sun was cutting into his naked mouse's tail, too; it felt like sunburn." instead?

But that's a very minor 'nit' indeed, amidst such written excellence.

Thank You for posting!